Author Topic: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition -- IT'S FREAKIN' DONE  (Read 14134 times)

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Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition -- IT'S FREAKIN' DONE
« on: August 14, 2009, 02:26:53 PM »
IT'S DONE. YES, DONE AS IN FINISHED AND COMPLETED AND NOT RAW.

Are you ready for this? Of course you're not! Nothing could prepare you for this! NOTHING!

Missions 1-5 and 9 by Foggle!
Missions 6-8 by Micki!!
There's also a Bonus Mission, and I did that one, too!

This is so much better than the original version (which I am embarrassed of) that I can hardly believe it's a remake!

LINKS:
Read it in the Gallery! Uploaded in reverse for your viewing convenience!
Download it from MediaFire!
Download it from MegaUpload!

Table Of Contents!
Mission 1 starts on 003.jpg or Page 5 in the Gallery
Mission 2 starts on 019.jpg or Page 19 in the Gallery
Mission 3 starts on 035.jpg or Page 31 in the Gallery
Mission 4 starts on 051.jpg or Page 46 in the Gallery
Mission 5 starts on 067.jpg or Page 59 in the Gallery
Mission 6 starts on 080a.jpg or Page 73 in the Gallery
Mission 7 starts on 096.jpg or Page 87 in the Gallery
Mission 8 starts on 112.jpg or Page 102 in the Gallery
Mission 9 starts on 128.jpg or Page 118 in the Gallery
Bonus Mission starts on 144.jpg or Page 134 in the Gallery

Stick with it 'cuz it gets a LOT better as it goes along. This was a long time coming, but not a long time in the making. If I remember correctly, Missions 1 and 6 were finished in 2009 and Missions 2, 3, 7, and 8 were finished in 2010. I spent the last two weeks working fairly diligently on Missions 4, 5, and 9, as well as the Bonus one. If you read the first one when I posted it a long time ago, you should read it again, because I changed it to make it funnier and less stupid!

You might want to catch up with the first chapter of the classic Excel-Lency re-write (or the whole thing, if you want!) before reading this. Why? I'm not tellin! Keep in mind that this thing as a whole is far, far wittier than my bit on that ol' one.

The Bonus Mission is... well... remember this? YEAH, BABY!

LET'S ROCK!
« Last Edit: February 19, 2011, 03:51:55 PM by Foggle »

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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #1 on: August 15, 2009, 05:16:08 AM »
Awesome, looking forward to see the rest of it :D
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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #2 on: August 16, 2009, 04:41:41 AM »
I love your 'bastardisations', im loading it up!

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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #3 on: August 18, 2009, 01:02:34 AM »
-applause- So funny. I can't wait until the next chapter!
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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #4 on: August 18, 2009, 08:23:20 AM »
Thanks, everyone! I'm working on Chapter 2 and Micki! is working on Chapter 7 right now. ;D

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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #5 on: August 18, 2009, 09:38:20 AM »
I thought it was chapter 6 O_o
Not that it matters much... I hope i am able to gain some laughs from my chapter \o/
I'm like halfway done with it...
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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #6 on: August 18, 2009, 11:55:19 AM »
I was wrong, it's actually the 7th one. It's numbered as the sixth in "canon," because the first one is chapter 0. But fuck that shit, it makes no sense. :P

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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #7 on: August 18, 2009, 05:08:39 PM »
I'm done with my chapter... I guess it's only appropriate to wait till the first couple of chapters are done before i upload it here...
In the mean time i would like you te review it, Foggle :o

Just to make sure the chapters are named correctly, and so you can compile it with the full set of the series later once all are done being re-written...
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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #8 on: August 18, 2009, 08:10:48 PM »
Please disregard the Table of Contents in the Chapter 1 download... It will look different in the finished version.

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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #9 on: September 19, 2009, 07:39:19 PM »
This is pretty awesome. Will you be doing just the chapters from this edition, or any of the others from the latest edition?

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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #10 on: March 15, 2010, 07:17:46 PM »
Micki! and I finished up two more chapters today. That's right, we're actually back to working on this thing again!

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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #11 on: March 16, 2010, 04:31:36 AM »
it's not much yet, but it'll be done, and i promise that they'll give you guys a bunch of smiles, laughs, or at least giggles, or perhaps even frowns of incredible regret from reading them...

I have finished two chapters so far, and will work on a third one, hopefully a 4'th after that too... I REALLY enjoy writing these, even when it takes forever to finish it... :D My English might not be the best, but i'm trying hard to have the characters stay in character, with a little twist to fit the theme...
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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #12 on: March 17, 2010, 01:30:05 PM »
Why'd you have to ruin it by censoring the good stuff, Foggle? Jeez...  :il_hahaha:

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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #13 on: March 17, 2010, 02:28:57 PM »
It would be interesting to release an uncut edition >_>
But the main reason was to make it available to (almost) everyone on our forum, and outside it...
But i dunno, i wouldn't object on working on the the more juicy pages :il_hahaha:

this thing isn't far from finished btw, i finished a total of 3 chapters by now, two chapters were finished in a row, and foggle just finished chapter 2..!
If we keep up the pace like this, we might just end up being done with the whole thing by next month..! :D
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Re: Municipal Force Daitenzin, 2nd Edition
« Reply #14 on: March 17, 2010, 03:37:10 PM »
Can't wait to see what you've done. :ehail: