My Flashes (Excel Saga!: Remnants posted!)

[MincyMatsu]

Excel still needs that shiny dot in her eye..! It feels a little "empty" and "dead" looking at a face without that shiny spot...

Try removing it from Hyatt... you'll see she'll look more dead than she already is..! (yes, that's possible, actually)
This could be used well for dying effects too btw... Remove the shine when Hyatt dies, it helps B))

Many Anime's (probably also manga's) use this, when they want to add some sort of "emptiness" to a lifeless character... they seems almost like living dead, or vampires...

^She looks a bit more happy and bright instead of demented and scary.    

The other look suited her just as well though. lol!

Yeah, it's just the eyebrows... it's funny at times, how much a change minor detail can cause

I always loved one certain Expression of Excel actually... Anyone able to guess which one, before i say it..?  

[Lord Il]

^Not totally sure, Micki!

Would it be the dazed and confused sort of look? (When her eyes are clenched tightly closed? That's a personal fav of mine.)



I'd also like to see Excel with the eye shine.

[I'M Eh-chan!]

@ Micki!:

Is it this one?:



Also I will add in the shine.  I just haven't done it yet for Elgala and Excel.

@starcat:

Haha, you don't have to tell me that her costume changes every volume!  I will make that line a little thicker though.  I think the scheme I used here was taken from a consensus among the manga covers.  But it still keeps changing there too!

For the shoulder pads, I'm going to have to add a second point where her arm comes out and then I can tilt them back down.  I think I might have to make multiple shoulder pads anyway because of the way they move with the arm.  These things are going to become quite difficult since I don't think you'll let me get away with the "flip the whole pad when the arm is straight up" method I used in the other flash.

The curls are easy to fix, I just have to change the layer order.

And I'll add in the other two points to the ribbon.

And other stuff...

[I'M Eh-chan!]

Okay, turns out if I added that second (or third, as the case may be) point to the shoulder pad, it would have overlapped with her bosom.  And we all know the response the last time that happened...

I added the other two points to the ribbon, shrunk the pads, made the stripe bigger, added the eye shine, put the curls in front of the body, moved one of her arms closer to her body to match the other arm...and I think that's it.

[Lord Il]

Y'know, just when it seems something can't get any better... I mean, WOW!

And of course if anyone would know the details of El, it would be starcat. ^_^

Great job!

[HA1L ILPALLAZZO]

this is just starting to get better and better

[MincyMatsu]

Great improvements... Helped quite alot...
And yes, that's more or less the expression i was thinking of (that of Excel)

[I'M Eh-chan!]

Thanks for the compliments everyone (though they should mainly go to Micki!  He drew the originals, I just modified them.)

And I've figured out how I'm going to do the shoulder pads:

[MincyMatsu]

That solution should do the trick... but please show us versions of Excel And Hyatt doing it as well... to make absolutely sure everyone has it right...

It's not always sure that the same trick works for every character (well, maybe, maybe not)

And thanks for throwing the credit after (got me right in the eye  :shock: )
I'd really like to see a picture of all the Flash versions once done... would be nice to have around... Like: "Original Concepts = Finished Flash versions"... It's like seeing the process step by step, and i like such things...  

If just Rikudou could see what his fans are doing for a tribute... But does he even know this website exists..?!

[Lord Il]

If just Rikudou could see what his fans are doing for a tribute... But does he even know this website exists..?!

That's actually a good question. I'm not certain if anyone from here has tried to make contact with him to have him aware of this site.

I think it would be a good gesture on our part to somehow show him the finished flash once done. I bet he'd love it.

[MincyMatsu]

Yes, and not just that... our beloved forum was mentioned a few times (or at least once, where it was recomended for fans to take a look) in the Oubliette in the Manga... therefor it has at least a slight official connection to the English version of the Manga (how little it may be, it's THERE)

Thereby giving us at least a slightly bigger chance of getting the audience we want (that being even more fans of the English Manga, and Rikudou himself, as he must follow at least a SLIGHT bit with the english versions production)

What i'm trying to say is:
It's just right, to make him see how much his foreign fanbase loves his stuff, and since this forum has it's slight connection from the past, it's more likely to make this happen ...

Maybe we should notify Carl about this project

[Edit:]
Ehrr... i'm not trying to sound like if "we deserve it more than other websites"... just saying...
After re-reading my post, it sort of made it look like that was what i was saying

[MincyMatsu]

Perhaps looking for people outside who can..? (in case we don't got anyone..?)

[Lord Il]

I'd suggest making a subtitled version for Rikudou-san, though. Can anyone translate into Japanese?

Perhaps looking for people outside who can..? (in case we don't got anyone..?)

If we're unable to get someone here to translate and if everyone is very serious about doing this, I can try asking some people I know from outside who are studying Japanese. The worst thing they can say is "no."

Getting someone fluent in Japanese would be great though as to ensure no errors are made.
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Just to let everyone know, I've sent my voice files to Eh-chan! last night.

@Eh-chan!: Please let me know if you've received them okay.

[I'M Eh-chan!]

ZOMG, if Rikudou-san saw this I'd die of happiness and/or embarrassment.  Either way, I would certainly be super-honored if he took the time to watch!  *goes off and has delusions of grandeur*

*comes back*

Oh, that's right, I have a reason for posting:



Ja-ran!  I'll admit that I got dragged by the necktie into the world of Suzumiya Haruhi and spent the past few days reading the fan translations instead of working on the flash.  But now that I've read through all the releases, I can get back on track.  So here's Hyatt in her Across garbs.

Lord il, I have received your voice files, and will listen to them right away!

And Micki!, that's a super idea about showing the progression of the images.  I can show the original sketches, then the first flash versions used in Excel Saga!, then the new versions and what not.  I will decide on whether to include this once the flash nears completion.  I'm pretty sure it's going to be quite a few megabytes in size as it is, so I will see how much more that would add.

Okay then, I'm off to listen to voice files!

[MincyMatsu]

That's what i had in mind, the three versions...

Anyways, to comment on Hyatt

Her head seems too low... or it's her shoulders that are too far up

Her skirt is actually more like light-blue/light-pink of some sort, not all purple... it changes from time to time... but purple is certainly not the right color
(picture below)

Whatever it's called, you're missing this "elevation" of some sort at her feet...
I also included it on the original sketch
It's little fun details like this which can seem important at times... Or maybe it's my perfectionism again
(same picture below again)

Her gloves change from blackish to, purple... whatever seems to fit best, you may wanna try both... You probably have other pictures  on your HDD already to get a reference of her with different colored gloves...
(once again, the picture below)



Else i didn't notice any other real things yet that need to be changed/modified